Dear friends,
After taking part in a Haiku contest, I got inspired to make an attempt at writing haikus.
My fellow bloggers, who are well versed in this poetry form, please read and leave a comment about my humble attempt. Will mean a lot to me.
Update: Emily of Musings of electric Soul has kindly pointed out the extra syllable in my first line and Walt from Walt’s Writing has been generous enough to help me fix it.
Thanks so much, dear friends. This is the essence of being in a writing community and constantly learning from each other.
Happy Blogging!
Megha Sood
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I’m a mother of a smart and energetic seven-year-old. I started expressing myself creatively since the last two years. Since then I have been continuously inspired by events in my life and around me which has helped me in penning my thoughts.
I’m an avid reader, loves to sing, an ardent lover of poetry and sometimes can scribble few lines too. Loves to dance in the rain, have an undying love for nature, can watch the beautiful sunset for hours. Love to kiss and hug my loved ones.
I have worked in the IT field for almost a decade as a manager, worked crazy hours and traveled around the world. In that busy schedule, I never got the time to creatively express my thoughts. Now every time I finish a poem, free verse anything it fills me with so much happiness and excitement and a feeling to have created something of my own. I’m planning to post at least one creation of mine weekly.
Lastly, a million thanks to all who visit, like or follow my tiny bits of creation.
Every time you do that, I get to know one more beautiful person in my life and get the chance to see their creation too.
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Your first line has an extra syllable, otherwise it’s excellent.
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Oh yes just realized this.Thanks so much Emily.
Should I fix it?
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You could say Sitting near koi pond…
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Thanks so much dear Walt.I fixed it and updated my post.
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Anytime my friend 🙂
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Love the fix, this is a difficult art form, it takes practice, and sometimes rewriting. i find it helps to put parenthesis around the syllables of each word then total each line.
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Thanks so much Emily for your advice.Appreciate it
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This is beautiful Megha. It has that Japanese flavor to it ☺
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Thanks so much for your help.
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It’s a pleasure Megha 🙂
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Did you see the updated one? I fixed it
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Yes I did ☺ i was just suggesting a possible fix, but you went ahead and used it! ☺❤
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What good is an advice if not followed.Thanks again.
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You’re welcome ☺
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A beautiful haiku. I have koi in my pond and this haiku made me think of them!
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Aww that much be so serene to watch. I love koi pond.
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Me to! The fish are so lovely.
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A beautiful haiku..
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Thanks so much for your kind words.
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Beautiful, Megha! I could feel the calm, watching the fish silently swim 🙂
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Aww thanks so much Dorinda.Any word of prose from you makes my day.
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How sweet! Thank you! 💕
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This is beautiful Megha! Great attempt!❤
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Thanks so much Richa.
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I think this is beautifully written. I love Koi ponds, some of those fish get pretty darn big. 🙂
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oh yes..you are right.
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Beautiful! well done Megha!
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Thanks so much Lilly
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Yay!! way to go Richa.We are burning flames igniting each other in the process.What an honor.
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Great first attempt! Maybe the title – Peace instead of Pond?
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Thanks Susi may be I’ll write my next haiku based on peace.
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🙂 peace, a beautiful subject
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Megha, this is stunning. A beautiful haiku.
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Thanks so much Eugenia.I’m still learning.
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We all are still learning. You did a lovely job.
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Thanks Eugenia
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